At dawn of understanding

[abu nuwas]

At dawn of understanding

Writing at dawn of understanding. Good.
[b]Though early in mourning I shall assume you mean 'morning', though I suppose some double-meaning is possible.
misty and brief, Good.
desire in drawing out adorning relief
Of spoken thoughts eagering anew stand I do not care for 'eagering' - no harm in inventing words, it simply does not touch me. I do not get the function of 'stand'. This sentence begins with 'Though' and 'desire' has to be the subject, but I cannot find any main verb to follow, unless it be 'stands'. Or perhaps it is written more loosely, and 'thoughts would be subject, and ;desire' just thrown in for flavour.
At raising wavy lengths hand in hand. I would like this, but the rhyme strikes me as forced, and I cannot quite swallow it.
So the words of the night must star so vast, 'star' seems just inappropriate here.
The quarter a moon inflaming to rounding grief 'Quarter a moon' ? Sounds nice, but does not convey meaning to me.
That even understanding in time will disappear. I like this, in itself, and as reaching back to the title and first line--mainly first line. The title might be quite different, though personally, i do not think titles v important.[/b]

Now--welcome to the Pig! There are many better critics than me, but the idea, esp of the Serious Critique you chose, is to give, well, serious critique.

I hope you will keep us up to date on your travels, perhaps in light poetic form. I see you speak Flemish and Walloon. I know that native French speakers often have difficulty in picking up the stress in English (de DA de DA de DA). I do not get the feeling that this is so with you. A French translation would be a help...