07-31-2012, 05:51 AM
I wonder if what you've written counts as poetry or some stream of conscious rant (I wonder this about the few attempts at poetry writing I have tried as well). I think it goes back and forth from serious thoughts to humorous thoughts in a way that suggests you did not have a handle on what exactly it was you were trying to say, which I then think it what your intent was all along. OK so this is but my second attempt to offer critique of someone else's work which may only be 'shite' (my critique) and I do not know if this is the type of input people are looking for.