07-29-2012, 06:08 PM
I really like that title, Tracey 
The picture I get is looking up from the bottom of the ocean/lake, through the quiet but intense activity of the underwater world, to a clocktower on the shore -- or possibly to the sun as it passes across the sky. Something circular, at least, otherwise there'd be little point to pi. The other possibility that comes to mind is of those huge discs of coral, which is backed up by the "bracted potential" line.
I think the contrasts are good. Normally we associate activity with noise, but underwater that sound element is taken away so the movement itself becomes the focus, without any other sensual distraction. Maybe a few too many hyphens but otherwise the imagery is, if not entirely clear, definitely rich.
The picture I get is looking up from the bottom of the ocean/lake, through the quiet but intense activity of the underwater world, to a clocktower on the shore -- or possibly to the sun as it passes across the sky. Something circular, at least, otherwise there'd be little point to pi. The other possibility that comes to mind is of those huge discs of coral, which is backed up by the "bracted potential" line.
I think the contrasts are good. Normally we associate activity with noise, but underwater that sound element is taken away so the movement itself becomes the focus, without any other sensual distraction. Maybe a few too many hyphens but otherwise the imagery is, if not entirely clear, definitely rich.
It could be worse