your english is very good.
and your dissertation on the orchid is also good.
I think if you could spend a little time giving it a consistent rhyme scheme it would add a lot to the poem, at present it varies throughout the poem ababca seems to work well in the 1st stanza so that's one possibility you have. (it would mean breaking the poem up into 6 line verse.
apart from that i'd look at how wordy it is and where you could trim it down taking out anything that doesn't really add to the piece. i think you've written a better poem than many people who have english as their first language.
thanks for the read.
and your dissertation on the orchid is also good.
I think if you could spend a little time giving it a consistent rhyme scheme it would add a lot to the poem, at present it varies throughout the poem ababca seems to work well in the 1st stanza so that's one possibility you have. (it would mean breaking the poem up into 6 line verse.
apart from that i'd look at how wordy it is and where you could trim it down taking out anything that doesn't really add to the piece. i think you've written a better poem than many people who have english as their first language.
thanks for the read.