I Sink Irony

[Deor Ana Log]

we could’ve flown away
My heart sinks for the lack of
pregnant pause
And yours forgets like today is fictitious
So I am done with pretending, irony
no more asking please
Dressing up your cares
Like I don't want you naked
This love was lost for one
Not two was too much
And you still wave, just not enough
And my hairline aches for the time I lost
counting flowers for you
like it was fate instead of a fairy tale
I know in real life
We still had a friendship
Until my lifeboat sunk
Now we are wilted flowers
my hair wings when I wake up
we drowned anyway
and I am okay

[Deor Ana Log]

I have completely reworked this poem, and it definitely deserves a second look.

[wasellajam]

I have completely reworked this poem, and it definitely deserves a second look.

Hi, Deor, it can be confusing to come back to a thread and find the original poem gone. Here’s our preferred way to post an edit:

When doing an edit:

Try to always do the edit or revision above your original
just go to the opening post and click on edit
Then edit your poem;

1st Edit or 1st Revision(the choice is yours)

blah blah black sheep
have you any wool?
sfvblqjahbfjb
hfajbfjkbf

Original version;

blah blah balck sleep
lhcs;kjbf;akbjf;a
sfvblqjahbfjb
hfajbfjkbf

If you put this (without the space after the slash) around the old one it will hide it but leave it accessible.
[pre verse] [/ pre verse]

[Deor Ana Log]

Thank you for the help! I would love your feedback as well, if you have time.

[wasellajam]

Thank you for the help! I would love your feedback as well, if you have time.

Sure, I just read everything multiple times, I hadn’t quite gotten a grip on the original and this one isn’t easy for me either. I’ll get there.