April Grins

[Mark A Becker]

April Grins

April wears a foolish grin, beaming
blossoms from bare limbs, blending
birdsong buzzing sounds, warming
up our eyes with flowers, urging
green from underground, peeking
sunshine between showers.

Now we feel the weather turning
day by day from worse to better, luring
us into the sunny, catching
us off guard with blowing, laughing
though it isn’t funny, fooling
us, suddenly snowing.

[rowens]

Attuned to my own rhythms, when I use a relentless gimmick like this, I like to give some relief after a while, and make a stanza or so with less relentlessness.
But that doesn't fit the relentless tone of the poem.

The second stanza opens with a line that would fit a change in rhythm. That it doesn't is the point.

[Mark A Becker]

Attuned to my own rhythms, when I use a relentless gimmick like this, I like to give some relief after a while, and make a stanza or so with less relentlessness.
But that doesn't fit the relentless tone of the poem.

The second stanza opens with a line that would fit a change in rhythm. That it doesn't is the point.

Thanks for the comment rowens. The gimmick in this one is my light hearted twist to the opening of The Wasteland by Eliot.

[rowens]

If you read without the last words of each line, you get the nice thrust of : Birdsong buzzing sounds up our eyes with flowers.

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Also, when you get into the quantum physics of poetry, there are even whole articles on precisely why it is The Waste Land and not The Wasteland.

Kind of like human psychology, you go along the same train of thought and emotions for decades until you make a change in how you spell or define one or three of the words or color one of the feeling-tones that link up that track.

[alonso ramoran]

It's a nice nod to Eliot. I revisited the first section of The Waste Land to do a slight comparison, respecting the lightheartedness of this piece. The Burial of the Dead seems very mired in its time post-WWI. I thought there was a somewhat missed opportunity to echo the spirit that that piece was written in, with SWANA tensions, disillusionment in the US via Epstein files and the redactions implicating world leaders and ceos, AI and warfare in the time of AI, etc etc. But I sense that that is probably a poem you didn't want to write.

[Mark A Becker]

I thought there was a somewhat missed opportunity to echo the spirit that that piece was written in...

But I sense that that is probably a poem you didn't want to write.

Well alonso,
My poem is intentionally lighthearted. You are certainly welcome to write a version to echo the spirit that Eliot wrote in.
... Mark

[Bunx]

I was just thinking about writing a snowing in April poem, it reminds me of a certain Prince song. It's weird where I'm from we got such little snow pack I wanted to write "Thank God it snowed in April" a poem for climate change. It was a fun read thanks for the read.

[alonso ramoran]

I thought there was a somewhat missed opportunity to echo the spirit that that piece was written in...

But I sense that that is probably a poem you didn't want to write.

Well alonso,
My poem is intentionally lighthearted. You are certainly welcome to write a version to echo the spirit that Eliot wrote in. 
... Mark 

the first section of the waste land's structure does sound lovely. i can definitely see why you wanted to write a lighthearted poem in its fashion. appreciate your sharing it