Well wishes

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A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

[ilovewomenandbeer]

1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

I really liked the feeling behind your poem—it reads like a genuine blessing, and lines like “I would feed them all if I could” really stuck with me.

One small thought I had was around the line “peace love and happiness.” I tried thinking about it as “love in peace calls happiness,” which felt a bit more focused and intentional to me, like it shows how one leads into the other rather than listing them.

Overall though, I think the message is really strong—just maybe tightening a few phrases like that could make it better.

Additionally, is the gray text intentional a hint to the line earlier “my secret confess”, if so, lean into that more

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1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

I really liked the feeling behind your poem—it reads like a genuine blessing, and lines like “I would feed them all if I could” really stuck with me.

One small thought I had was around the line “peace love and happiness.” I tried thinking about it as “love in peace calls happiness,” which felt a bit more focused and intentional to me, like it shows how one leads into the other rather than listing them.

Overall though, I think the message is really strong—just maybe tightening a few phrases like that could make it better.

Additionally, is the gray text intentional a hint to the line earlier “my secret confess”, if so, lean into that more

yeah, its a message of hope i presume and im glad you liked it. "Love in peace calls happiness" is pretty good. And no, the gray text was an accident. Could not change it so i just went with it. 

[wasellajam]

A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

[Smiley]

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1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

[jeanelyking]

1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

idk much about poem critiquing but i really liked this! it reminded me of the warm aura from that one angel of an aunty that all the cousins love, especially with the “i would feed them all if i could”; that gave it a real maternal and genuine feel. 

quite short and sweet, and i think it should be. only real critique i could think of is maybe being more adventurous with the adjectives used, and possibly leaning more into the maternal/nurturing personification of ‘well wishes’. i hope that makes sense lol.

[Smiley]

1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should

idk much about poem critiquing but i really liked this! it reminded me of the warm aura from that one angel of an aunty that all the cousins love, especially with the “i would feed them all if i could”; that gave it a real maternal and genuine feel. 

quite short and sweet, and i think it should be. only real critique i could think of is maybe being more adventurous with the adjectives used, and possibly leaning more into the maternal/nurturing personification of ‘well wishes’. i hope that makes sense lol.

It does make sense and the feedback is appreciated!