birds
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i've got birds
on my drainpipe
-- how i wish
it was a metaphor
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(05-19-2022, 04:19 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  i've got birds
on my drainpipe
-- how i wish
it was a metaphor

Ha!  I used to drive past a church with an old cemetery.  There were always 15 vultures sitting on the roof.  Super creepy.
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(05-20-2022, 12:26 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  
(05-19-2022, 04:19 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  i've got birds
on my drainpipe
-- how i wish
it was a metaphor

Ha!  I used to drive past a church with an old cemetery.  There were always 15 vultures sitting on the roof.  Super creepy.

There's a barn by my school with 'Jesus saves' spray painted on it. There's a bunch of screaming goats inside.

any correlation is entirely coincidental
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#4
guarding
graveyard
-- vultures

inside the barn
goats scream
-- "Jesus saves"

on the outside
- jesus saves
on the inside
- goats scream
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(05-20-2022, 01:15 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  guarding
graveyard
-- vultures

inside the barn
goats scream
-- "Jesus saves"

on the outside
- jesus saves
on the inside
- goats scream

It's cool when talking in passing becomes a poem.

this is a potential prompt actually

Objects I found on the root back from my school, turned into a narrative



yellow eyes
on the roof
--black cat

caterwauling
blood trail
--daughter gone

in the fence
caught fur
- turns its head
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#6
sounds good man, it used to happen on here quite a lot

by the way

in the fence
- caught fur
down the field
- turns its head

was better as 

in the fence
caught fur
- turns its head

it's excellent - although I know why you edited it
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#7
guarding
graveyard
-- vultures

inside the barn
goats scream
-- "Jesus saves"

on the outside
- jesus saves
on the inside
- goats scream

guarding
graveyard
-- vultures

..I think you could add this again at the end for repetition..

thanks again (:
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#8
Yeah, i like it
It works
Cheers
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#9
"It's cool when talking in passing becomes a poem," said SC.
Yes, the add-on effect can be fun. How about adding on to this...

The IT-tionary
There must be no more gender specific references of any kind!
To wit, all IT-tionaries must be ammended, and corrected:
no more history, only theirstory
huricanes are now theyicanes
hymen, is now hytheir (uh, wait a minute, that one may not work)
...
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(05-21-2022, 09:59 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  The IT-tionary
There must be no more gender specific references of any kind!
To wit, all IT-tionaries must be ammended, and corrected:
no more history, only theirstory
huricanes are now theyicanes
hymen, is now hytheir (uh, wait a minute, that one may not work)
...

she came
the rest is history
- hurricane hymen
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