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it's not like i imagined
no ignition no baptism no cathartic trumpet
just facts and a nervous joke
like undressing at the doctor's office
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I have no idea what you're talking about, but I like the way you say it
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(10-22-2016, 06:16 AM)lizziep Wrote: it's not like i imagined
no ignition no baptism no cathartic trumpet
just facts and a nervous joke
like undressing at the doctor's office
With all due respect to @CRNDLSM, I disagree. To paraphrase (perhaps incorrectly), finding the truth is kind of flat: you thought you knew the truth already - hence the embarassed joke - and what has changed, really? Even if it in fact "set you free," as claimed, how does this freedom differ from the previously unsuspected captivity? A particular letdown if you worked hard to attain this state of accurate understanding, and now it's... just there.
(No, I don't disagree with liking how she said it.)
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I like the way you put that dukealien! But please, there's no due respect
(10-22-2016, 07:49 AM)dukealien Wrote: (10-22-2016, 06:16 AM)lizziep Wrote: it's not like i imagined
no ignition no baptism no cathartic trumpet
just facts and a nervous joke
like undressing at the doctor's office
With all due respect to @CRNDLSM, I disagree. To paraphrase (perhaps incorrectly), finding the truth is kind of flat: you thought you knew the truth already - hence the embarassed joke - and what has changed, really? Even if it in fact "set you free," as claimed, how does this freedom differ from the previously unsuspected captivity? A particular letdown if you worked hard to attain this state of accurate understanding, and now it's... just there.
(No, I don't disagree with liking how she said it.)
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(10-22-2016, 07:49 AM)dukealien Wrote: (10-22-2016, 06:16 AM)lizziep Wrote: it's not like i imagined
no ignition no baptism no cathartic trumpet
just facts and a nervous joke
like undressing at the doctor's office
With all due respect to @CRNDLSM, I disagree. To paraphrase (perhaps incorrectly), finding the truth is kind of flat: you thought you knew the truth already - hence the embarrassed joke - and what has changed, really? Even if it in fact "set you free," as claimed, how does this freedom differ from the previously unsuspected captivity? A particular letdown if you worked hard to attain this state of accurate understanding, and now it's... just there.
(No, I don't disagree with liking how she said it.)
You're a great reader, duke  Always a privilege to be read well. Yes, a worthy interpretation, and brought out different elements than I hadn't thought about. I did a slight edit just to bring out the theme of speaking the truth aloud, how it sounds different that one might have thought and that the act of speaking it doesn't necessarily bring about thunderbolts from the sky as previously feared/anticipated. Doesn't conflict with anything you said, I just used your interpretation to clarify that aspect of my own thinking, so thank you for that.
(10-22-2016, 07:18 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote: I have no idea what you're talking about, but I like the way you say it
Hello, Crundalism. >  < Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
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Prefer the first draft -- reads more forward without "sound", without "click", without "splash".
Reminded me of this:
especially as played in the movie "A Serious Man". Although it's a little less didactic, more poetic -- thus why I got this like a koan, where I can't say what I got, only that I got it. Lovely, lovely work.
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Hi River! Yeah, I think you're right about the original being better, so I'll just put the edit in a spoiler.
Too didactic you say? Hmmmm, I'll think on it.
That particular video is giving me a seizure, but I do love that song.
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I meant the song was more didactic, this more poetic, to none of each's detriment. My tongue fails me.
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