Corn Haiku

[spacecoaster]

I wrote three haiku about corn.

Field of corn, cut
relieved-when I turn left
I see the cars

geese and starlings
where the corn once stood-
bitter wind

one dry stalk standing-
caught in a soybean field
alone the corn waves

[Magpie]

Hi, I would definitely say that your middle haiku is easily the best of the three, although I think that you could still make the middle line of that particular haiku more concise. It is a good image and there is a chance to make it a really good haiku. The other two haiku seem very awkward and their inclusion here somewhat distracts from the fact that the middle haiku is the gem.

Field of corn, cut
relieved-when I turn left
I see the cars

I think I know what you are trying to portray here but it is far from clear and the way it reads doesn't help the issue. The comma in the first line feels very clumsy and it made me read the first two lines incorrectly a couple of times. A suggestion would be 

freshly cut cornfield

and then from there it will be easier to sort the rest out so that you get the chance to say what you are really trying to say.

But as I said the middle haiku is where it works, I would make it more concise and repost it on it's own.

Hope this is of some help for you,

Thanks for sharing them,

Mark

[donbouquet]

the middle one is the best. eliminating the words "geese and" may even make it better - one too many images for a single haiku