Mona Lisa

[ellajam]

As the lady flies by on her pedal bike,
hair streams behind her, smile ready to strike.
Bumping downhill on the cobblestone street,
unused brakes ready under her feet,
an artist awaits her, gleam in his eye.
Readying canvas and paints just to try
to capture her essence, his chances are slim.
He succeeds though we guess is it Mona or him?

[justcloudy]

I definitely smiled, thanks for that!

And the rhythm totally works with the bike theme. =]

[ellajam]

A smile was my goal, score.

[heslopian]

The last line really made me giggle. Though I know this forum isn't about technical feedback, I must say I really liked the enjambment of "try/to capture her essence", though the rhyme of "bike" and "strike" is a bit cornball. Again, though, no technicalities, it's a fun poem, smart and amusing. That last line is still making me giggle. Cheers for the read