punctuation
#1
language broken by
commas, colons, periods
adds definition,
ambiguity lost but
interpretation hemmed in.

ha, I still can't get it right.Smile
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#2
Very witty; I need them all. Hey: Where's your semicolon!? Don't forget forget to capitalize 'Language.' Tongue
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#3
you could take it even further ?

language broken
, : ; .
defined ambiguity
lost interpretation hemmed
in

just funning with your piece ..taking it to even more abstract. ....i found it fun to think on.
wondering what 'i still can't get it right' means .... >>> Gina
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(10-27-2013, 08:03 AM)emerald13 Wrote:  you could take it even further ?

language broken
, : ; .
defined ambiguity
lost interpretation hemmed
in

just funning with your piece ..taking it to even more abstract. ....i found it fun to think on.
wondering what 'i still can't get it right' means .... >>> Gina

ha, nice. It's a tanka, so I'd have to drop that semicolon. And that last line was just a comment on not being happy with my punctuation of this one.


language broken by
, : .
adds definition:
ambiguity dispelled,
interpretation hemmed in.

ha, still unsure.

Big Grin
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#5
...not to mention capitalization...
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
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(10-29-2013, 06:38 AM)ThePinsir Wrote:  ...not to mention capitalization...

oops, ummmm, Oops.Big Grin
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