Rabbit haiku

[Bunx]

EDIT
sleeping in grass
a rabbit
wishful luck

*Bunx is...realizing.... this is not a haiku*
Bunx realizing, Bunx has been trolling in the pigpen for fun.

[ChristopherSea]

Nice Bunx. We have a species of wiry rabbit where I live that are referred to as marsh hares. Other than being slender, their other identifying characteristic is having no tail. I believe in keeps predators from spotting them readily (no bright white cotton ball on their bums ).

[Bunx]

thanks froggle!
Christopher quite awesome! i was thinking the same thing as well as the whole "lucky rabbits tail" thing

[btrudo]

sleeping in grass
a rabbit
without a tail

so is the emphasis on the rabbit?

sleeping in grass
without a tail
rabbit

or is on the lack of tail?

sleeping in grass
a rabbit
where's your tail?

[billy]

sleeping in grass
a rabbit
without a tail

it's pretty good bunx, if you can try and make the last ine or two take a different approach. so they play off against what's already been said.

a suggestion would be

sleeping in grass
rabbit without tail
my good luck

great effort

[Bunx]

rudo- i guess it was paint more of a picture of an rabbit that is lucky without a tail

[Malu]

EDIT
sleeping in grass
a rabbit
wishful luck

Good content, got the seasonal meaning. But for me I'm just a stickler about haikus having the 17 syllables, 5-7-5 style, but that's not nearly as important as content, so good job!